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Poems of Limerence

Posted by Ronak M Soni on December 16, 2009

No one probably knows what limerence is so here is the wikipedia article. I’m only dealing with a narrow band of limerence, as it is possible that the other symptoms do not manifest.

Limerence

Desire without love.
Depression, and euphoria.

Depression, about us,
from life.

Euphoria, about us,
from dreams.

what went around

He followed me around.
I’ve
followed her around.

I got angry.
She
got angry.

Two months in,
It burst out.

Life Without Limerence

Purposeless bliss.
A lack of euphoria,
But bliss yet.
She was all that mattered.
So,
Now,
Nothing does.
I’m a zombie,
Tied to life
Solely by responsibility.

I’ll do what I like,
For me
– And only me –
Without calculations
Or games.
My feelings will be independent of her,
My thoughts free of her –
Not devoid, but
Free of her.
My happiest moments will be mine,
Truly
Mine alone.
My saddest moments will be mine too,
Truly
Mine alone.
Hopefully, now I’ll love,
Not limer.
Hopefully, now I’ll love,
Something other than her.

She enters,
My eyes are drawn.
Life without limerence:
Purposeless bliss,
Yet for me to experience.
(It’s declining, not gone.)
She hates me,
But we talk more.
I enjoy the politics.
I enjoy antagonizing her.
Life is fun.
I can’t help but laugh.

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9 Responses to “Poems of Limerence”

  1. S M Rana said

    Now you are reviewing the movie of your own life!

  2. Fiction, SM, fiction.

  3. S M Rana said

    Fiction, I was thinking, must be the hardest to write, more than movie reviews, or one’s own life, since fiction is pure creation. Even Shakespeare borrowed all his basic plots.

    • Well, Shakespeare adapted his plots, usually removing his characters’ motivation from the plays, which ended up making them richer in depth. Then again, the plots are not what we remember from Shakespeare.

      I’m not sure if I agree with you, SM, about fiction being pure creation, since everything is based on something else. Even Kafka’s stories straddles the real on their way to the bizarre.

      As for the poems, Ronak, I like the use of repetition in the first two poems, but the third poem could use some different word choices. For example, since you want “Life Without Limerence” to feel as empty as a life without limerence would feel, I’d use as sparse language as you can, and as short sentences as you can. Fewer explanations. For example:
      My feelings will be independent of her,
      My thoughts free of her –
      Not devoid, but
      Free of her.

      Would read better excluding the last two lines:
      My feelings will be independent of her,
      My thoughts free of her.

      Or, if you want to include those lines:
      My feelings will be independent of her.
      Devoid of her?
      No.
      Free of her.

      In addition, I would remove “truly” before “mine alone” (both times) for a stronger, and bleaker, impact.

      You might want to make some further changes, but those changes should help that poem attain a bleaker, and sparser, edge.

  4. S M Rana said

    Limerance is an interesting life-phenomenon well described by Shakespeare sonnets, his drama Romeo and Juliet, fifties Hindi romantic films, Heer by Waris Shah, Kangra paintings. Would you agree? Or is it a different creature? The word falling as used in falling in love is perhaps precise because of it’s involuntary nature. Who will be the next victim?

  5. SM:
    What I picked up on was the idea that he would lose interest if he got her, that he keeps on doing politics about her, and the mood swings.

    I would agree with LD, that fiction is rarely pure creation, but I agree with you that it’s harder to write. With reviews, the tone has already been set.

    LD:
    Thanks for your criticisms. Pondering over them. I think that as a substitute for short sentences, I’ve gone for short lines*. How’s:

    My feelings will be independent of her,
    My thoughts free of her.
    Not devoid, but
    Free
    Of her.

    ? It makes the sentences shorter.
    No offence, but your version doesn’t really fit the voice.

    Without that ‘Truly’, there will be two ‘mine’s in a row, not to mention the fact that the assertion would lose some strength. Are you sure it will be better that way?

    Thing is, I’ve trimmed this poem a lot, and I thought that every explanation was needed (it would be too vague otherwise; in fact, I’ve received input that it already is, but I chose to disregard it 🙂 ).

    *This raises the interesting question of how you read poetry. I personally leave rather a lot of mental space between lines. You?

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